[Geopriv] RE: [dhcwg] WGLC for draft-ietf-geopriv-dhcp-civil-04.txt

Hi:

Here's some quick review comments (these are mostly nits):

- Clean up figure in 3.2?

- Is there a minimum option length? Wouldn't it be at least 3 bytes (to
specify the country code and what)? Or, is at least one "civic address
element" also needed in which case the minimum length would be 6?

- Is an IANA registry of the "what" values required? Or, do we believe that
the 3 values are all that will ever be needed (which is likely the case)?

- For clarity, section 2's text:

   As discussed in Security Considerations (Section 5), the GeoConf_Civi
   option SHOULD be returned by DHCP servers only when the DHCP client
   has included this option in its 'parameter request list' (Section 3.5
   [2]).

   The DHCP long-options mechanism described in RFC 3396 [8] MUST be
   used if the civic address option exceeds the maximum DHCP option size
   of 255 octets.

Should likely be reworked to:

   As discussed in Security Considerations (Section 5), the GEOCONFIG_CIVIC
   option SHOULD be returned by DHCPv4 servers only when the DHCPv4 client
   has included this option in its 'parameter request list' (Section 3.5
   [2]). Similarily, the OPTION_CIVIC_ADDRESS option SHOULD be returned by
   DHCPv6 servers only when the DHCPv6 client has included this option in
   its OPTION_ORO.

   The DHCPv4 long-options mechanism described in RFC 3396 [8] MUST be
   used if the civic address option exceeds the maximum DHCPv4 option size
   of 255 octets.

And, similar adjustments should be made to section 5.

- Also, in section 2, shouldn't the text:

   To provide multiple renderings, the client
   repeats sequences of address elements, prefixing each with 'language'
   and/or 'script' element (see Section 3.3). The language and script

Be:

   To provide multiple renderings, the server
                                       ^^^^^^
   repeats sequences of address elements, prefixing each with 'language'
   and/or 'script' element (see Section 3.3). The language and script

- In section 3.1, it isn't immediately clear what the countrycode is used
for. I presume this is used to specify the mapping for the Catype to a
textual representation?

   Countrycode: The two-letter ISO 3166 country code in capital ASCII
      letters, e.g., DE or US.

- In section 6, specify that the initial allocations are provided in Section
3.4 (I've found that IANA doesn't read the entire document, just the IANA
Considerations section so they'd need to be told about the initial registry
list or where to find it in the IANA Considerations section.)

- Bernie

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> Subject: [dhcwg] WGLC for draft-ietf-geopriv-dhcp-civil-04.txt
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> Included below is the announcement of a WG last call on
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> - Ralph
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